Janet Deckert

[gedweyignasia]

Not much is known about your history, and you are a closed book to even those who live in your home village.

[Considerate_]

Not much is known about your history, and you are a closed book to even those who live in your home village.

I enjoy the delicate brush of mystery, just enough to tease the senses but not enough to spoil the ending.

The oblique references told in a narrative style, as if it's your own character reading her own biography which adds a dab of humour.

You've condensed it notably, but the concise manner in which you write is quite appealing.

All in all, well written

[kleomenes]

Can I suggest an amendment?

"A warrior from a faraway land. She seeks revenge on the orcs who killed her family."

[Considerate_]

That would completely ruin the style in which this is written!

I suggest and amendment to your amendment!

"An individual of unknown profession from a faraway or closeaway land. You seek to repay the unspecified race of savages who killed other individuals who may or may not have shared the same lineage as you."


... I just ruined the writing style by making it too long, didn't I? >.>

[blue_penguin]

Oh, this is cool! Can you judge mine:

"Uninjured

Friendly"

[Considerate_]

Well that's of course more a description rather than a background story, but sure!

Very Spartanic and reader friendly, it suggests a healthy individual with an open minded attitude and easygoing.

The simplistic nature of the description is both abstract and metaphysical... while also a little endearing. Though it's very fashionable these days it's seen too often to be recommended, it's a bit like going to a theatre performance only to realise half the crowd came in the same outfit.

[Nerialka]

I like the one I've read recently :
"There is nothing special about this object"

Can't remember who the player was, but it made me laugh !

[gedweyignasia]

I'd like my 2000xp, please.

[MajesticMoose]

Pshaw! No template! Let me take care of that for you.

Personality Profile: ??
General Health: ??
Deity: ??
Initial Alignment: ??
Profession: ??
Base Class & Proposed Development: ??
Habits/Hobbies: ??
Languages: Common + ??
Weapon of Choice: Rapier! (Knew that one)

Background: ??

Goals: ??

Possible Plot-Hook Ideas and Misc Facts: ??

There. I think you're qualified for the exp now